A round of applause for your editor…

“I think maybe what you need to challenge yourself to do is just to be a touch more of an asshole.”

When I read these words I knew for sure that my editor was awesome.

Since being admitted to the Glimpse Correspondents Program and landing in New York, there’d been a good deal of anxiety on my part. Other correspondents were writing about North Korean refugees and legacies of violence in Cambodia, while I was hanging about in Brooklyn, going to pickle festivals and stalking local banjoists.

My first Glimpse drafts were slow coming, and when I did finally send them off to the editor, Sarah, they were massive, awkward things, not quite sure of what they were supposed to be (probably not unlike myself circa 1997). One was full of generalities and didn’t go deep enough. The other was all detail and lacked a strong overarching narrative. Neither one was really fit for public consumption.

Part of the problem was that I was so focused on one of the pieces. I’ve been alluding to it here as the Urban Americana piece; in it I wanted to get at the whole rustic aesthetic gripping the city. All the flannel and beards and banjos and pickles; all the un-metropolitan texture. I’d spent so much time getting lost in this (and working up a large bank of observed details with no coherent thesis to unit them), that I was left only with scraps out of which to build the other piece.

It was, however, this neglected piece that took form and was submitted, edited and finished first. Perhaps because there was so little to work with, it wasn’t that hard to write – a collection of anecdotes and observations from the hipster cinderblock enclave I’d chosen to live in.

The first thing Sarah told me to do, much to my surprise, was to trim it down. She encouraged me to strip out unnecessary episodes, and to get down to characterisation. This was kind of uncomfortable for me. This blog maintains a pretty austere absence of characters; I tend to write about other people’s lives only slightly less than I write about my own (unless you count things I’ve eaten). The story, however, required that I talk about the private lives of friends and friends of friends – their frustrations, their squalid living arrangements, their visa issues, their run-ins with the law.

While that piece skipped along towards completion, the Urban Americana piece was proving more problematic. There was just too much to say; too many bits to try and rope together. Sarah had an uncanny ability to figure out what I’d been trying to say all along, and bit by bit she guided me through the wealth of superfluous detail, encouraging me to probe deeper and deeper into everything I was describing. Then, after several drafts, she told me to be more of an asshole, and everything fell into place.

The final pieces look almost nothing like the original drafts submitted, except that they’re both still very long. They pack little emotional punch and aren’t really intended to uplift; they’re not your typical Glimpses pieces. They are, however, funnier and richer than they might have been. They’re better written than I expected them to be, largely because Sarah knew exactly what was worth keeping and what wasn’t. You can check out her handiwork below.

I believe a round of applause is in order…

1. The lost kids from the loft that doesn’t exist

2. The countryfication of New York City

And because I like bastardising Sufjan song titles in my blog posts

7 responses on “A round of applause for your editor…

  1. I really, REALLY liked the Urban Americana piece. I see the same trend happening here in Toronto, and it was impossible for me to read your story without reflecting on how difficult it would have been to write. You tackled really nebulous ideas and made the theme make sense. Awesome work.

    Also, agreed – Sarah is brilliant.

    • Thanks Keph! Really glad you liked the piece, and also that you appreciated the difficulty. Honestly, I went in thinking it would be super easy. ha. I’d love to do some more work about the general topic, but I think the style is already changing. More bright colours, less muted, natural tones. More ramen, less mac and cheese. We’ll see what happens…

  2. Phil,

    Congrats on your pieces. I remember reading the loft piece at Matador and enjoyed it — rich and detailed, a creation of that world. (And I’m fascinated with lofts in general — their look/style, what they symbolize…)

    An honest, focused, and sometimes harsh editor is so important. They have the eyes that we need. They should be applauded, indeed.

    • Hi Cheri! Thanks for reading and commenting. I know what you mean about the allure of the loft. I think I first stayed in one when I was 11, in Canada. Have been hooked ever since. Living in one now, or at least in the one I do, is slightly less romantic. Creaking stairs to negotiate every time I want to get into or out of bed. Even so, there’s something about it…

  3. Hi Phil. Fellow Glimpse Correspondent here (Spring 2012)–I really enjoyed your NYC pieces and would like to join in your round of applause for Glimpse’s editorial awesomeness via Sarah M. Every time she suggests a change, I think to myself, “well, of course. Now why didn’t I see that?” I wish all of my writing could benefit from her editing.

    • Hey Sarah, congrats on the program. Hope it’s going well for you. I’ll be sure to look out for your finished pieces. I wonder if there is some way to have Sarah M. come on board as my full time editor? Not even just writing. She could edit my life. Give it a stronger theme and characters, take out the bits that aren’t going anywhere. We all need a little more Sarah M. Good luck finishing up your pieces…

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